Hey man! I'm reading your story on Bioshock and saying you are great! Just speed some stuff up please? I like your story it's just that it took 4 chapters for the main character to actually meet her protector. Other than that it's great! Can't wait for more chapters. I also have a fanfiction account. I read stories varying from Avatar, Assassin's creed, Gears of War, Alien vs Predator, Left 4 dead, Halo (sometimes), Prototype, good books at random, and other games.
Can't wait for more.
...wouldn't want anything to happen now, right?